Not too good.
Doesn't look like you wanted to make it that good on purpose, but meh. I have my three review quota to fill and your submission was on the way.
~ Animation/Graphics ~
No animation to speak of. I can live with that if you can make it work, but it didn't seem you got it working for you with just the simple pictures. It also seemed like you didn't do the pictures yourself as they looked like things you found off of the internet.
To make something like this work I would recommend making your own pictures, adding simple animations or at least transitions between pictures to allow it to run smoothly, and adding color to the pictures so they are easier on the eyes.
~ Story/Content ~
The story was so boring that I don't even remember what it was all about now. Doesn't seem fitting for the newgrounds audience and doesn't seem like it would be interesting to too many people at all.
I think it needs to be a bit longer and you could add a next/back button so people could read/view at their own pace since some people read faster/slower than other people.
~ Audio ~
The audio was terrible. Very staticy and hard on the ears. Not only does it need to be turned down a bit, but you need to find some music without the static.
~ Overall ~
Seems like it was just a spam submission, but either way it needs a lot of improvement to be anything worth a view in my opinion.