Score: 10

"Smell of a nast spam series"

submission: Bahamut's NG Log Bytesize

date: October 17, 2009

This could have been a nasty series that went the way of the Hitler flashes. I can just see it now... a 60 episode series where each level comes out and beats up Bahamut or even just random users getting beat up by their level icons. D: Oh the horror of it all.

I remember watching the NG Log video once before and I don't happen to remember this submission at all. Oh well, it was a little while ago and I don't have a great memory. A good addition to it though and this was a very good short flash submission.

Score: 10

"Holy crap... I almost forgot..."

submission: Bahamut

date: October 17, 2009

That darkenssdweller was a user on this website. It's been an extremely long time since I've seen him do anything on newgrounds. *Ahem*

Corky52 wuz here

Now that the teasing is over... A very interesting flash submission man. I actually watched it twice for fun. Once upside down like you had it and then once straight up by using the ctrl+alt+down arrow thingy.

Let me just say that Afro looks terrible without anything covering his head. I almost cried in fear of the site. Please don't ever do that again. :( Even though it had a random title, it was a good idea for a flash submission and you did a good job at making it all around.

Score: 7

"Nasty animation/graphics"

submission: Snakes on a STFU

date: October 17, 2009

Okay, maybe not the animation so much as the over exaggerated mouth movement kind of adds to the humor here. I wouldn't mind seeing some variety though like the person moving other body parts such as his arms/legs/eyes/etc...

I never actually saw the movie and I don't plan on it. I also won't join the internet fad as I don't think I've ever joined a internet fad in my life. But I think you portrayed the view of those that are like me and think it's rather annoying when people do stupid stuff like this.

The voice wasn't terrible in this situation, but probably still would have been a bit better if you would have used a real nerdy type of voice. While on the subject of nerds you should have drawn the character much better and made him really nerdy looking as well. Glasses (no offense), acne, nasally voice, etc...

Score: 10

"Ah, back to the Bahamut."

submission: 50

date: October 17, 2009

I have some free time while I'm sick so I guess I'll stop by and review some of your movies for old time sake. It's good to be back to the simple animation, random yet predictable plots, repetitiveness, and some low quality voice acting mixed with some good voice acting.

I think the last submission of yours that I reviewed was my ever so favorite 33 1/3 flash so I guess I've missed a lot of submissions in between.

So decent submission all around. A pretty good plot running together with the 33 and 1/3 flash submission even though the ending was a bit repetitive. Are you planning on returning to the same strategy for number 100 or are you planning on making something full blown for that?

Score: 1

"Needs a lot of work to be good."

submission: Aqua man episode 5

date: October 17, 2009

~ Animation ~

This was one of the biggest things that needed to be improved in this flash submission. A lot of part didn't contain much of any animation at all and the animation that you had was crude and rough for most of the time.

Not all of it was completely terrible though and you did show a few spots of promise, but you get the all around impression that the submission itself was rushed a lot, which really shows in the animation.

For the parts that were animated well I would take tips from those spots. Remember what you did and what made those spots smooth/look good and copy that. You can do it if you put the complete effort into the entire submission.

~ Graphics ~

I can almost say the same thing that I said in the animations part of my review. Some parts looked "alright", but for the most part this wasn't very easy on the eyes at all. I would work on individual character designs and master each individual character. When and only when each character started looking much better I wouldn't think about making another submission.

Something else that really would help improve the submission would be something along the lines of detail in the background. Again, this comes down to practicing your drawing and taking the time in making each scene look good. A well detailed background can do a lot for a submission.

~ Content ~

I haven't watched any of the other episodes, but I think I can kind of see where this series is going. Kind of generic and nothing that somebody is going to be very interested in following, but at least your going somewhere with the submission at hand.

A more organized menu would really help this submission. With links going back to all of the other movies in the series and also a nice little information section where people can read what has happened up to this point.

Not only the organized menu though, but also they way that the text is lined up. It looks like you just threw some text on there randomly, which is exactly what you did. More organized, lined up, professional looking text will improve this submission greatly.

~ Audio ~

The quality of the voice was terrible. There was a lot of static, which means you need a better mic or different voice actors for your series. The clicking sound on the beginning and end of each voice could probably be gotten rid of with a simple program like audacity, which is free to download so search it and have it become one of your tools.

Not only was the voice quality bad, but the voice itself wasn't good. I'm assuming you did the voice acting and not to be mean, but your not very good at it. I would suggest finding someone else to voice act for you.

The music and sound effects were done very well though and probably the only good part of the submission at all. Even the worst submissions have something good about them in there I guess. :P

~ Overall ~

It really needs a lot of work in almost every category. The animation needs to be much smoother, the drawings need to be done much better, there needs to be more detail in the characters and the backgrounds, and you need to find a good voice actor with a good mic.

I hope that my review helped and gave you some details on how to improve your submission. Keep striving to get better and good luck on future projects.

Score: 7

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submission: APA TU?! (what is that?!)

date: October 17, 2009

~ Animation ~

First off I felt that your cameraman could have been a bit steadier with the camera. :P I also think that you did a great job with the smoothness of the animation, especially with how jittery the camera was. I would think that it would be a bit easier to animate with a stationary camera, so congrats on doing the good work with a bit of a harder environment.

~ Graphics ~

You had some pretty good video quality. I know that flash can take down the video quality quite fast, but you also had a big file size for such a small movie. (I know how it can be though as I have many flash/videos on newgrounds that are actually above 10MB and some are even up to 18 and 19 MB)

The drawing of the little guy was done quite well. Good color, good drawing, good design, and even though a bit simple, it was still quite effective.

~ Content ~

I guess the real downfall was the lack of content in the submission. This would be cool if you could take some video and even add a story line to the submission or at least some sort of plot.

You could have even done something very simple such as have the little guy fall on someone that was walking below and to have that person react so it gives the illusion that he is actually there even more.

~ Audio ~

Thank you very much for the subtitles as I couldn't understand a word that was being said. Sound quality was rather good though, but again quality wouldn't have mattered if it wasn't for the subtitles in this case.

~ Overall ~

Looks like you succeeded in the experiment so why not try and make something out of it now?

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Score: 10

"~ Review Request Club ~"

submission: How Not To Make A Comic

date: October 6, 2009

~ Animation ~

The animation of the writing was very smooth. It really doesn't get that much better animation wise in a FBF such as this one. It was almost like you were recording the screen as you actually drew it.

~ Graphics ~

Pretty good artwork all around. I've seen the paper background/comic/drawing flash so many times, but it is still one of my favorites to watch visually on the site.

You are great a drawing and there really isn't anything to critique in this section of the review either. O.o

~ Content ~

At first I didn't like where the flash was going. Then you added the sweet essence of surprise with the tasty nature of humor to go alone with it. The boob joke on the side kick made me laugh and then the ending made me lol a bit as it was just the best thing that could have possible happened in this submission. Humor was awesome.

~ Audio ~

I didn't like the voice at first either because I just thought it was someone trying to act like a nerd too much. It kind of grew on me in the short amount of time that the submission lasted though. The sound effects that you used sounded great.

~ Overall ~

A good laugh along with good audio and graphics. That's enough to get a 10 out of me any day. Easter egg was alright, I was expecting funnier though. I had a hard time finding it so I had to cheat with the tab button. :P

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Score: 5

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submission: The Morph!

date: October 6, 2009

~ Animation ~

Good for FPF. Just about what you would expect from seeing a FBF of this nature. It does have a little bit of room for improvement smoothness wise, but overall pretty good.

~ Graphics ~

Not the best end results on most pictures. A little rough on the edges, but just like the animation not terrible at all. Has a bit more room for improvement though. Maybe using thinner lines could have helped the smoothness of the drawings a little bit.

~ Content ~

I wouldn't have minded seeing a bit more. I like that it started off black and white and then it started to draw the man, etc... I think that you should have went a bit farther though and started slowly drawing a background such as the ground, trees, sky, etc.. After things are drawn out then you could have morphed it with different colors to fill in the picture at hand.

Then when you switched faces around it could have been a little more interesting and you could have even played around with the background changing as well.

~ Audio ~

*by the time I've written that part of the review I've forgotten what the song was*

Ah, I had to go back and check it. :P Good song choice all around for a FBF like this. Really nothing to critique with the music so nice choice!

~ Overall ~

I'm sorry for the lower score, but I thought that a bit of improvement in the animation, graphics, and the content of the submission could have made it a bit better.

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Score: 5

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submission: DinoStomper

date: September 30, 2009

~ Animation ~

The animation was smooth in all aspects. There really isn't much to comment about other than perhaps a few more different styles of walking or movements would have added some variety to a game, which was overall very repetitive.

~ Graphics ~

Graphics were fine the way that they were, but some color probably would have added a lot to the submission. Not only would it make it better visually, but it also gives you the chance to put some blood on the footstep of the dinosaur and as he takes more and more steps without stepping on someone there would be less and less blood on his feet.

~ Story/Content ~

The idea of the game is alright, but it just gets boring after awhile. To make it better you could do something like having to squash so many enemies in a certain run and if you complete it then you get to go to the next level.

This could also help the game by bringing in a little shop system in between levels where you could do something such as upgrades to increase speed, size, maybe give you friendly units near your feet that widen your range of attack, etc...

You could have something like after stepping on 10 people in a row your speed increases slightly or you get a size bonus, etc... If you had the store system you could get bonuses for stepping on more and more people in a row.

~ Audio ~

Music was pretty good and I think that it fit with the game very well. The sound effects were also pretty good, but you could have used some more such as the dinosaur roaring when you let someone get by or after a certain amount of people squashed, etc...

~ Overall ~

A decent little game, but gets boring quite quickly. Adding more variety and some color would help a lot.

Moving the info. button to somewhere that is easier to see would be helpful as I missed it the first couple of times that I played. So a menu might be a good way to improve the submission slightly?

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Score: 5

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submission: LL-Aniamtion

date: September 28, 2009

~ Animation ~

I loved the style and it looked like there was a bunch of effort put into this. The sketchy type of animation was done rather well. I actually watched it a couple of times through and the first time through it didn't really look that good to me, but the second time through it grew on me and I knew that it was a new and interesting style. All the props for trying something new and doing a good job at at.

~ Graphics ~

The backgrounds that you used were awesome. The white canvas with the purple splashed against it randomly not only looked very abstract, but in my opinion just looked really good with the animation at hand.

The sketchy type of drawings for everything was pretty cool. At first I thought that it might be better if you would have done a single solid line instead of the sketchy lines, but like I said before when I watched it through the second time it grew on me a little.

~ Story/Content ~

Not really much of a story. It started off like it was going to be pretty cool, but slowly went down hill when you did the whole "Later" white screen and whatever it said directly after that. (it went by way too fast to read)

I thought it would have been much better if you would have just animated what happened in between or even just skip right to the next scene instead of using the white screen.

The little twist with the new Lock character made me laugh a little bit and I thought that it would be a good place to end the submission. All of a sudden a bunch of random things started happening and you introduced color in one part. I thought when all of this started happening that it really ruined your submission.

In my opinion it would have been much better if you would have done something such as ending it where you did the little plot twist in the middle and then used the rest of what you animated with off to the side with some credits going by on the other side.

It would have also been nice to use something along the lines of a preloader. With a file size of 8.4 MB some slower computer might have a hard time starting the flash to see if it's done and then having to X it out when it freezes and start all over. A preloader is a simple thing to make your submission better and only takes a few seconds to do.

~ Audio ~

I thought the first song that you used was pretty cool. It almost gave the submission a scary feeling and that it really matched the animation style very good. The speaktonia voice sounded bad like usual, but I really liked it in this situation because it did make me smile a little bit when the white noise of the record being scratched was introduced.

The other audio used after that was also alright, but I wasn't crazy for it exactly.

~ Overall ~

You had a great animation style and while I know that there was a lot of work put into this I have to complain that it really went to hell about half way through the submission. Simple things like taking out the white screen with the "Later" and adding a preloader would have made this much better than it was.

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