Fro's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[feed the trolls]

I like your style.

Quick question before I get into the review. Why do you have one of the tags as the word "with"? It doesn't really make sense because it's not a word someone would search in a keyword search and really has nothing to do with your picture. It seems to be a waste of a tag.

Was this something that was drawn on the computer or away from the computer? I only ask because to the left it almost looks like a page of a book or something because of a line that changes color and kind of separates. The top right hand corner shows a lot of white and also looks like the end of the top of a page.

The entire picture uses soft colors very well. The black on the bottom didn't really match the rest of the picture because of the intensity of the color. Other than that the picture is actually really awesome. It's a good idea and a funny play on words. It looks like a lot of work was put into it and it really does show.

The "woman" troll in the middle is very comical with all of the young children trolls trolling around. All around very good picture and I really like the style used.

[The Sweedish murder machine]

Needs more blood.

A cool character design for sure. I think that the only thing that you messed up on is the small sections of skin that go outside of the outline on both the left and the right shoulders. Other than that I don't think I see any mistakes.

I wouldn't mind seeing this character with some sort of background. He's all bloody and has obviously been killing things so perhaps having a background with dead bodies laying everywhere would be very fitting for this piece.

I would also like to see a bit more blood on him. There doesn't seem to be any on his one arm and he doesn't seem to be the type to miss any spots. :P He also looks like he should be a little more muscular then he is. He has the beer fat/muscle type where he's really strong and big, but not really defined. Maybe that was the look you were going for though.

An all around good piece.

[Welcome to the Neon District.]

A very cool style!

I've seen a lot of pixel art, but I haven't seen pixel art this good yet on newgrounds. It's really done well, but I would like to see it much bigger or zoomed in. I know you can click on it and it gets a little bigger, but it would be really cool if I could see all this great detail that you put into the submission.

The black shadow around the edges don't really fit in my opinion. On top of that I don't like the laser thing that looks like it's coming from a satellite on the roof. Those things kind of take away from the picture in my opinion, but not enough to drop the score at all.

The things fading into the background look amazing. The blue and purples that you used in this picture were amazing. In fact, all of the colors that you used in this submission were quite good.

All in all this is an amazingly detailed piece of pixel art. I recommend making it a bit bigger or zoomed in and you really have a great piece.

[Street car]

Slightly better than the last one I suppose.

Again with the things that you didn't make. You could have very well made the tire rims and the fire yourself. The two signs look like they would be extremely easy to make even in a program such as paint so I would suggest doing that as well. Making it completely original helps out, but with this piece I don't know how much it would.

The first thing that sticks out to me is the thickness of the lines used. It's much better to use a thin line when drawing almost anything. The second thing that I notice is the red light coming out of the back and front. Neither should have an outline to them especially since light isn't a solid object and doesn't have a physical presence.

Again with the white space as well. I suggest coloring in all of your white space. This can easily be done with almost any program. If you're using photoshop it should be an easy task, but it's an even easier task if you do it in paint. If you would have filled all the white space then I would have given you at least one point on this submission.

I personally feel that the green of the "fin" on the back of the car was very out of place. The green doesn't really match with the black and red of the car. However, the green on the bottom of the car was decent. It would have been better if you made the lights of the car transparent such as this.

Making the dragon detailed would have increase the points that you got on this submission a lot. A detailed dragon with a car that had the filled in space, along with all original work from yourself would have earned you at least a 3-5 from me.

The tires are really poor. Neither of them are round at all. Since you did this by hand I suggest taking something like a small shot glass or another small circle to make round tires. It's virtually impossible to make a perfect circle without tools, but I almost think that a few seconds worth of effort could make something pretty close.

Give this thing a background of some sort. Put it out on the street at night time. of course, it would obviously match in with the background if you did that at night so you need to give some shine to the car. have reflections, make it 3-D, give it much more detail. I personally think that is way out of your talent range as of now, but with a bit of practice you should be able to work your way up to it.

Overall, needs to be more detailed, use thinner lines, try semi-transparent colors, add a background, color within the lines and fill the white space, and give much more effort. Practice, practice, practice.

[Test Flight]

Google huh?

Yeah, I don't think you have to tell us that the background is from google. It says google right there in white letters in the bottom right hand corner. Anyway, for your other comments it should be something like this. "A new drawing. The background is from google images." I'm not trying to be rude with that comment though. I'm just trying to let you know if English isn't your native language.

Anyway, I'll start with the first eyesore. You probably shouldn't use a background picture from google to create a piece of art. You should probably go ahead and try to make the piece completely original by creating everything yourself. At least crop out the compass and the google logo to make it seem presentable.

The second eyesore is jet or airplane, which isn't good because it's the only thing that you created yourself and is the focal point of the submission. The blue really doesn't look good coming out of the back of the aircraft. I don't think the exhaust would be blue in the first place, but I also don't think it would be a perfect rectangle line either. Ever look at a jet in the sky? The white smoke that follows it isn't exactly straight, but it's wavy.

The bad thing about the aircraft is that it basically has no detail and the lines that build it's body are really sloppy. If you drew this on paper and scanned it in read part A. If you did this in paint or another program then read part B.

A) Use a ruler to draw the straight lines. The curved lines are actually quite good, but the rest could use some work. The color needs some help here. Instead of solid black with white borders I suggest using gradients to give this more detail and not to outline your work as there aren't outlines in real life. If you were going for the cartoon type look the detail would be all that you needed then.

B) Use the line tool as your friend. I also suggest completely coloring in right up to the lines. I see some white space that isn't needed here. (The rest can be read in part A so I guess you'll have to read both parts anyway)

I can't really tell what part is the window. I mean, I see where the window is suppose to be, but it just doesn't look good if that's what it is there in the front. Perhaps making it more of a transparent grey instead of the off color small section that you have there would be better.

Overall it's not very good and you have a lot to improve on, but if you like doing art then don't give up. The 0 is for multiple things, mainly being the fact that you used a picture from google and that it looks like something that I could personally create in five to ten minutes with minimal effort. I'm really no artist either.

Sorry if you find the review mean or rude, but I feel like I've given you as many tips to improve as I possible can. Like I said, if you enjoy art keep working and you'll get better. Practice, practice, practice!

[Cammy]

Pretty decent.

I noticed a lot of small things that slowly pulled the score down from this little by little. Let's start from the top... and by that I mean the top of the picture, which would be her legs. Looks right between her hands. Oh no white space that shouldn't be there! I'm assuming you forgot to magic eraser that out and turn it into the background?

So let's work our way up her body and down the picture. There's the white space again between the breast and the arm! This is where I wasn't sure what you did. If you make this part the background then it makes her body look rather weird. Her breasts are already odd shaped, but this would really through off her chest section. If it were part of her shirt it would probably look a bit better.

Other than that it's a decent piece of art all in all. Like I say for most pieces of art it would be cool to see her in an actual background instead of just against the transparent grey of newgrounds.

masterTUTA99 responds:

Thanks a bunch for taking the time to review, and to notice my rookie mistakes. It truly helps to have someone take some time to help me out.

[Rough Draft OCT REF: Kazumi]

Not bad.

The only thing that I can notice faulty with the girl is how wide her shoulders are compared to the rest of her body and also how the body is a little off. I feel that the size of her head and shoulders should make her about 3 inches taller, a couple of inches wider at the hips, arms, midsection, and legs.

The guns themselves don't look that great. The clip that comes out of that gun is way too small for how long you have made the chamber. It's almost like the guns were made backwards. Even the smallest guns are just as long as they are tall.

The quality of the girl is done well though. What you would expect for the style that you used. I personally wouldn't mind seeing the character put into some sort of background such as a street or an alley. (Even though it was a character design it's nice to see where the character would be)

Also, what's up with the quality of the picture? It's a little low for what you would expect photoshop to export. On top of that the words on the picture are slightly too small to read comfortably unless viewed in full size. The background is actually nice, but like I said I would enjoy a scene better.

All around a decent picture, but I feel that the ratios are off a bit.

Digishinobi responds:

Thanks for the comment! ^_^ yeah this is a little over a year old, and now I'm in art school and have developed my proportions ALOT more since this pic. I'm happy you finally got around to commenting on this! I'm still trying to figure out the whole scouting thing, so maybe you know :)

On a side note: here's an updated pic if you wanna see: http://www.newgrounds.com/art/view/digishinobi/mm-final-round-cover

[Newgrounds Knight]

I like it.

I know that you wanted to make this different than the newgrounds level icon, but there is one missing eliminate from the level icon that you should include in this piece. That would be the shine. Your knight looks like his armor never quite shined even when it was new. It has that dirty gold look to it. The shine gives this epicness to the knight.

Other than that the drawing is pretty well done. I think I envision the knight a little more bigger in terms of muscle mass, but I guess a guy in armor and a sword doesn't have to be all buff and whatnot.

It would be sweet if you put a background to this picture. Perhaps instead of having the icon be so big in the top left hand corner you could import the blue aura as the background to the picture itself. That or scene where the character is outside because I think blue and green would compliment this picture well.

JakBaronKing responds:

Truth be told, I'm not very good at photoshop.

This is just using a paint bucket.

As for the background, I do believe the contest I entered for this piece required a solid white background.

[NG Logo Redesign Final - HW]

Nice, simple.

It's nice and simple, but it could use a little more to make it more interesting. The grey really doesn't fit the newgrounds grey, but I guess it doesn't really have to if you're making a new logo.

I like the gradient that you used, but like I said, it could use a little more. I think making the shape 3D or at least adding a shadow to it would make it much better. I personally think it would look best if you were to make the NG 3D and to make the Newgrounds have a shadow or reflection of some sort.

Overall, nice, simple, but could use a little bit to make it better. Congrats on the A+ and everything.

JakBaronKing responds:

It's funny you should say that.

Because I originally intended to use a "shadow-effect" on the logo, but my teacher said it was a bit much.

He said "Simplicity is the best impact for logos"

It's not so much as making an awesome lookin' logo.

But rather something so simple and catchy that in a mere half second a person from afar or driving really fast on a freeway will be able to recognize it.

Too complicated logos tend to be miss-looked because everyone's in a rush.