Not bad at all man.
Especially for one of your first audio submissions ever submitted to newgrounds. I loved how the beginning started off slow and it then got heavier. Some of it did sound out of place though and I'm never a fan of a fade out especially in this song. At least if the fade out was just a tad I think it would have made it sound better. Anyway, putting everything in to prospective such as how this was one of your first submissions and that most of it still kicked ass you get a good score from me.