Fro's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Fizz (Episode 1)]

Not bad at all.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Your submission was good all around, but it had great animation. Good uses of zooming in and out, great detailed backgrounds, smooth animations, great artwork, etc.. What I would expect from something from you.

~ Story/Content ~

I liked the story all around. The healthy food joke that you put in there made me laugh a little bit. The puppy cannon also made me laugh a little bit. So good humor and a decent plot all around. Even an informative piece about why the evil doctor guy failed at the end.

~ Audio ~

To me I personally found the doctors voice acting kind of.. mediocre? I think that's the right word, but I found Fizz's voice acting to be great. Voice acting overall was very good and the sound effects/music that you used was done very well.

~ Overall ~

A good story that gets away from your usual work. I hope to see more from this series! Keep up the hard work.

~ Review Request Club ~

Jimtopia responds:

Well personally I thought both of the voice actors did a great job bringing the characters to life, but you are entitled to your opinion, and thanks for the review!

[my second work]

Keep working!

~ Animation/Graphics ~

It's really not bad for your second work. The animation and graphics weren't bad. A little bit of room for improvement, but I think you have a good start here.

What I think is obvious is the need for backgrounds in your submission. Detailed backgrounds would add so many good visuals to your submission. Looks like you might have the talent to do it so I highly recommend it. Nobody really likes to see a simple white background in submission like this.

~ Story/Content ~

I liked that you used the slow down on the bullet, but I think that you might have used it too many times. I think that you don't want to repeat animations too many times and using the slow down for the bullet both times was a little too much.

You had a little bit of humor, but nothing spectacular. Really seems like the generic stickman submission. Next time work in some plot or storyline. If you just want to go with random killing then I suggest you make it about a minute or two longer.

~ Audio ~

Sound effects were alright, but again hearing the same splat noise again and again just didn't sound good. You'd expect a different noise every now and then.

I think some nice ambient background music would have gone good with this. Something that sounds like battle music or just pump up music.

~ Overall ~

Other than what I have suggested I would also suggest adding a preloader/play button, replay button, etc.. The basics. I also would like to say keep working because you will improve. Good luck in future projects and keep working hard!

[Total Attraction]

Good work

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Beautiful animation in my opinion. Everything seemed pretty smooth and the graphics were awesome. I think the only thing that I can comment on is when he "turned" to continue looking at the girl. It looked unnatural when he was just looking one way then the other way. I think he should have slowly followed her with his head and have his body move along with it.

~ Story/Content ~

Not much you can do in one minute is there? Well personally I think you did a great job with the time limit. I don't know what the rules were other than the time limit, but it turned out pretty well. A decent submission all around, but I didn't completely understand the ending to it. Perhaps that would be because the next section.

~ Audio ~

I didn't like the voices. I thought the quality was poor and the voice acting really didn't seem to fit the animation at hand. Perhaps I didn't understand the ending because I couldn't understand what he was saying. Really the only flaw though and the only thing I'm taking anything away for in your rating.

~ Overall ~

Didn't take anything away for the length and plot because of how this was for the one minute competition. Took a few points away for the audio, but other than that a good submission for this competition. I wish you the best of luck. Keep up the good work.

[TLB - Collision]

Needs work, but not bad.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Pretty good animation and drawing style that you have here. I think I would recommend doing some background work here. Perhaps just outside with the green grass, tree in the background, perhaps something slowly moving in the background like someone walking, while they are blurred out a little to represent being far away and hard to see.

~ Story/Content ~

Woo.. a very short animation. Ha, well I recommend making it longer, but since you probably want to leave it short I'll try to say how to improve without making it much longer. I think it would be better if you had more of a delay in the beginning. Nice peaceful background with birds flying by. Nice day outside and everything, and then all of a sudden the two run into each other. That way it's just not so sudden and there is a nice little build up effect.

~ Audio ~

The voices were ok, but the quality did sound a little poor. Not too bad though. I think it would have been cool if you used the delay in the beginning like I recommended and had the voices sound like they were coming from far away and then get slightly louder as they got closer. Also, since I think this really needed background stuff that it wouldn't have been bad to have things like birds chirping, wind blowing, etc..

~ Overall ~

The things that I recommended are completely up to you, but it's what I envision when thinking about how to make this better. Keep up the good work and good luck on future projects.

[Apple a Day]

Keep on working!

~ Animation/Graphics ~

It's really not that bad, but major room for improvement. Looks like you have some natural talent so I have no doubt that you can improve.

First off I think you should work on the walking animation a bit more. Study some tutorials and practice animating walking.

I'd then work on your drawing abilities a little bit. Like I said not bad, but some room for improvement. The tree didn't look too great and the apples with it. The man could have used a face and the whole thing could have been just a bit more detailed. Again, with practice I'm sure you'll become better.

~ Story/Content ~

Not much here really. It wasn't too funny or unexpected. Perhaps instead of being able to see the hole on the screen you could make it so he falls when he walks off the end of the screen or maybe even a hole breaking open as he walks.

Then instead of not animating the fall you could make it so we see him fall. A huge fall, hitting things like branches and sharp rocks on the way down. When he finally hits the ground he's still barely alive. He notices the apple right next to him and goes to grab it. As soon as he does a rock falls on him crushing everything but his arm.

Just throwing out some ideas. :P

~ Audio ~

Not bad audio at all. I really don't think there was anything to improve audio wise.

~ Overall ~

Keep working because you have potential. I hope my review gave you some good ideas and good luck in future projects.

[Mudkip Crazy]

Yuck

~ Animation/Graphics ~

They weren't terrible, but there was so much room for improvement. I suggest perhaps thinking about adding some colors into backgrounds and your characters, making much more detailed graphics of your characters, making much more detailed backgrounds with objects, adding more complicated animations since yours consisted of mostly very simple things, etc..

It may be more work, but it will make your movies so much better.

~ Story/Content ~

Ah, never liked the joke, but didn't let my opinion get in the way of the score. Could have been much better presented if it had better animation. Poor graphics and animation really brought the content of the submission down. Very over done, but again like I said I didn't let any of that effect the score I gave you.

~ Audio ~

This is what the yuck was for in my title. Wow, the quality of the voices really need to be improved. Very hard to understand and also took a lot away from the content of the submission. Perhaps back away from the mic a little bit. Almost sounded like you were spitting in it.

~ Overall ~

The content of the flash is suffering from poor graphics and very poor audio. I'd work on the audio before anything else though. Keep working and don't give up.

[Teh Dot Trilogy: Collab]

Not too bad guys.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Reviewing collabs like this isn't always the easiest thing because sometimes some people are really good, some are alright, and some are really bad. For the most part I can say that nobody was really bad in this. I will admit perhaps a few weak links here and there, but for the most part not too bad. Some really good ones and some decent ones. Can't really mess up a dot too much can you? XD

~ Story/Content ~

I liked the ones that went from just being a dot into turning into bigger things. Perhaps a couple more of those would have been better. I though a lot of the backgrounds used were really fitting. Even the ones that looked like they came from google. :P

Decent idea for a collab. Not really a great idea by all means, but I think it turned out well. I hope your proud of it.

~ Audio ~

I like the song, but I think you should have used a song from the audio portal. I'm never a fan of using copyrighted songs after having some of my youtube videos have their audio disabled. Fuckers. Song went well with the animations though.

~ Overall ~

Not too bad. Good job on this and good luck on any future projects.

Matt2k8 responds:

Thanks Corky.

Good review and i'm glad you liked it.