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[Flying across the world]

Great animation itself.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

You did a great job on the animation and graphics here. Your drawing style is very good and the animation was very smooth. I liked the way that you set up the flash having the viewer almost feel like they were flying from point A to point B. I think it would have been a little better if the beginning was slower and then you slowly built up to a faster and faster speed like you were taking off.

~ Story/Content ~

The flash itself was set up like a introduction to me. I can see this being done and at the end you flying right into *Insert random name* Productions Presents: *Insert random flash name*.

Believe it or not the preloader would have been nice. Some of us have dial up. :X Things like this start to play and then they stream making it rather laggy and I have to watch it twice through just to get the good version. If you had the preloader you wouldn't need the replay button as it would just go back to the play button again.

~ Audio ~

This really needed some music. Check the audio portal here for some ambient music or even something that seems a bit more action packed and I'm sure you won't be disappointed.

~ Overall ~

Nice intro style flash that needed a bit more of a build up effect and music to be better.

[TV Tuning]

I see...

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Not a bad style at all. Just really not the best style either. I think what would have made this easier on the eyes would be the use of more color and the organization of the text/menus. The places where you used text just seemed sloppy and I didn't like the fact that you used different font for words every now and then. I also think that the introduction to more color, especially in the introduction, would have made this better. Animation itself was actually very smooth and no complaints there at all.

~ Story/Content ~

I just don't see where this submission is suppose to be going. There isn't any humor, it's not a sad submission, there isn't any acting, there isn't any drama, etc.. I guess it's just really hard to tell what's going on in this submission. I could see where there was suppose to be some humor in places like the TV and the generic Anime part, but it just didn't make sense to me. Wasn't even really funny in a random kind of way. The two minute part was way to drawn out even if you were trying to make it drawn out on purpose. Cut it down by about ten seconds and that might be a bit better.

~ Audio ~

The voice acting wasn't very good. The voices themselves might be alright, but the quality was poor enough that I actually didn't hear a single word that was said throughout the entire thing. Also, because I had to turn the volume up for the voices the loud music that you used in the intro and 2 minute part were extremely loud. I think you need to turn that music down a bit, turn the voices up a bit, and try to get better quality voices. The voices also added to why I didn't understand what was going on.

~ Overall ~

The biggest faults of this submission was the lack of content/story and the poor audio. The introduction of more color might make this a bit better also.

[The Bath One]

Not bad

~ Animation/Graphics ~

The artwork wasn't bad at all, but it does need some work. It seems a bit sloppy here and there. Some places it was better than others. It seems like that was your style though. There could have been more of what I like to call "in between animations". You would just have your character start on one position and then he would suddenly be in the next without really much in between moving. You did an alright job at this sometimes, but all around it really needed more of this. So pretty much I thought the animation could have been a bit more complex.

~ Story/Content ~

I like the story to the submission. The whole scene with the chocolate was very funny. I can't believe a teacher would make you wait about an hour to go to the bathroom though. The text wasn't readable in some parts, but just seeing the top of the words gave me enough to make sense of what it was saying. A lot of the movie seemed to drag on though. I realize that's what you wanted for it to seem like to show how much the person had to wait, but perhaps it could have been a tad bit shorter in some spots.

~ Audio ~

I ldidn't like the music used, but I thought there could have been more usage of voices and sound effects. Perhaps instead ot the music you used you could use something more ambient therefor being able to use sound effects such as everyday classroom chatter, voices for the teacher and other characters, etc.. Check the audio forum if you need to find a voice actor and also check the audio portal here for some better music.

~ Overall ~

A nice little flash. It may have dragged on a bit and the usage of voices/different music would have made it a bit better. Keep on working!

[Ant men]

Hmm, not bad man.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

I think the Ant Men looked pretty good and for the most part the animation was smooth and perfectly fine. I don't like that a few times you didn't even include the animation of the bullets though. Sometimes you didn't even know who was shooting until you noticed the person that was shot. Next time I recommend adding the animation to the bullets for all of the Ants.

I really enjoyed the background to this submission. You did a good job on going into detail with the pictures, books, etc.. That really made the submission good!

~ Story/Content ~

I liked the use of ants instead of stickmen. I would have liked to see you do this and actually finish it. I understand that flash is hard and yes it is hard, but you are clearly decent at it all around. I recommend starting it by having the two different commanders telling their armies what the mission is (to get the cake obviously, but you could also build on that by having them collect a large group of food) and also giving them a speech to get pumped up.

There needs to be a way to tell from the different armies which can be done by color differences. I understand they are ants, but one group could be fire ants and the others could be carpenter ants, etc.. After they get their speech they could go on and you see the war being fought, etc.. The story would be up to you from here on, but I think it's a good way to approach it.

~ Audio ~

The sound effects were really good here. Just about the right volume and synced well with the animation. Something like this would be cool with voices, but of course that would depend on how much more content that you add to it.

~ Overall ~

A nice short flash, but really needs some work. I know that you think flash is hard, but keep practicing and you will get better. Also, why is the genre sports? I don't see where this is really sports related.

jokebookpro responds:

I dont know why it say sports but it always says sports, i guess i didn't finish the cartoon cause it would look better as a game thanks tho, you know a worms game like..

[Oh no I'm all alone]

Not too bad.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

There are a couple of things to improve on here. First off you could improve the drawing just a bit. The animation to the voice wasn't synced up the best, but also wasn't terrible. There is some room for improvement there. Something that I would have liked to see though would be a nice background. Something pretty simple such as outside with some trees/clouds or maybe even something inside with a table/bookshelf in the background. Maybe even a nice little fade or blur effect on the things in the background for extra effect.

Another thing that can look cool with something like this is some small background animation. Whether it just be the wind blowing something by in the background or whether it be something like a clock changing time. There is actionscript for a clock so it would just keep moving along as time went by in the real world.

~ Story/Content ~

There just isn't much here. When I think of a music video I think of a lot of exciting scenes. I understand that this was a small loop, but what would have been better would be adding a different scene a bunch of times whenever he sang the lines over again. Since this was about being alone you could have had a scene where he was in the corner of a room just curled up in a ball rocking back and forth and crying because he's all alone.

Just some small stuff like that. I'm thinking about 10 different scenes give or take a couple and then you can loop it from there.

~ Audio ~

The audio that you picked wasn't the best quality. Sounds like the mic he was using wasn't the best, but again it isn't terrible. Like I mentioned before the lips weren't synced the best with the voices so that is really the only place where the audio can be improved in this submission at all.

~ Overall ~

A short loop that needs some more complex animations and some more content before I would consider it good. It looks like you have decent skills all around though so you shouldn't have problems improving and making something like this better. Keep on working and you will keep on improving. Hope some of the ideas I gave you helped. :)

manjunath responds:

Thanks for taking the time and effort to give such a detailed and wonderful critic. Your review will help me a lot in the future. 10/10 for this review!!! :-D

[The ALL Sprites Collab]

Not bad at all, but a couple of problems.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

For the most part the sprites were very well animated and a couple of scenes looked really great. Some others though didn't look the best and looked like I had animated them. XD The one where Luigi would jump up or when he feel off the edge just didn't look as good as the others. I think it could have done without those scenes personally.

~ Story/Content ~

Again, just like with most collabs some were great and some were just kind of there to take up space it seemed like. I would have much rather this just been the really funny ones and the meh ones could have been removed. I wouldn't have minded the sacrifice in time and I'm sure most of your other viewers wouldn't have either. I liked the Chocobo one the best personally just because it was random, but the Mario chasing the mushroom part was also very clever. Removal of some of the cock jokes would have made it better too.

~ Audio ~

Some places worked good with voices, but not all of the voices sounded too clear. Perhaps finding one voice actor for all of the scenes could have worked better for that. The use of outside audio such as the first scene with old Ron there was alright I guess. A little different from what you would expect. Sound effects and music were well chosen though.

~ Overall ~

Pretty much what you would expect form a collab. Some good ones, some great ones, and some that just seem like they shouldn't be there.

~ Review Request Club ~

[Super Mario Invaded pt.2]

Hmmm

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Just as good as the first one if not a bit better. Smooth animations and again you had some more advanced stuff rather than the normal sprites that you see from noobs. (Again like me lol)

~ Story/Content ~

I loved how in the beginning you backtracked just a little bit so we could see the other side of a story. That really makes the flash interesting so we can understand why things happened the way they did and really makes it look like you know what your doing when creating a script.

It seems like there is more behind this then just the random invasion and that perhaps some evil character is trying to get rid of all the good sprite characters so it can take over the world or something of that sort. You set it up good so I'll have to watch the next one to find out.

~ Audio ~

Pretty much the same thing I said last time. The sound effects were well timed and the music went well with the animation. Voices might be interesting to try, but I just couldn't see them working in this type of flash.

~ Overall ~

Keep it up you are doing a great job. Perhaps work on the file size a bit though. This one was shorter than the last one, but had a larger file size. Have you been optimizing your audio?

~ Review Request Club ~

sleeeeep responds:

Yes in the third episode i hope to give more of the story and et up questions to be answerd. Good review, thanks

[Super Mario Invaded]

Pretty cool!

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Of course it was made with sprites so I can't really comment too much graphic wise, but the animation was great. A couple of times the movie lagged, but I think that was more fault on my computer than it was your flash. Really good animation and good use of zooms/pans. A lot of more complex animations that you don't see in the simple sprite animations. (Such as mine) So good job all around.

~ Story/Content ~

I personally love sprites so whenever you make one you can request it in the RRC and I'll review it for sure. :) I love that it's not just a random sprite movie and it has a lot of story in it. It seems that you set it up for a lot of action and even more story in future episodes because there will be a need to explain what's going on. A great first episode and it ended in a good spot that makes people want to watch the next one.

~ Audio ~

Obviously you wouldn't need voice actors. It could be interesting to try, but I think the bubble text worked just fine in this case. Words stayed up long enough that we could read. The sound effects were very well synced and the music that you used went well with the animation.

~ Overall ~

A very good submission and I'm actually excited to watch the next one. (Which I will be doing here in a little bit) Hopefully it doesn't let down. :) Keep up the good work.

~ Review Request Club ~

sleeeeep responds:

I agree with no voice actors since it takes away from the 8 bit characters. NES never really had voice actors and thats this kinda feel i want... the NES days

thanks for this review