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There seems to be much room for improvement in this song. The content that you did use in this song sounded pretty good, but I think it's more about what you didn't use in this case.
It was kind of boring and nothing new or exciting ever happened in it. Actually, not much happened at all and then it just kind of ended leaving me unsatisfied. That's what she said.
The introduction was probably the strongest part of this submission and you do have potential to turn this into a good creation. I just feel that it needs more going on and less of the same thing going.
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