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[Why Brawl Got Delayed]

Decent.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

What I would like to consider very basic/mediocre animation and graphics. A little below my skill level in my opinion for both drawing and animating. Seems like you simply need to practice your art skills and animating skills a little since both were very rough.

~ Story/Content ~

Not really too funny in my opinion. Kind of short also. I'm not that familiar with brawl so perhaps I'm just not getting some of the jokes here so I can't really comment on how I think you should make this funnier. I do think you should add several more scenes though. If something like this is going to be made then you should have about 5 skits at least.

~ Audio ~

Not too bad at all. The only thing I can think about fixing here would be adding something in the beginning without any audio. If someone puts their mouse over the play button and clicks it right away then the two audios mix and make it hard to hear clearly. Not too big of a deal though.

~ Overall ~

I think the art, animation, humor, and length need to be worked on to make this a quality submission.

[[TG] Muffin Man]

Ha, nah too bad.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Really well done here! I recommend you continuing the project just due to the fact that you are a pretty good artist/animator. Personally I can't critique your style in anyway.

~ Story/Content ~

*Reads the author comment*

Well work on getting the transitions down and I think you have a decent idea for a movie. Perhaps you could work a series out of this someway? I'd be interested in watching the episodes if you made a series. As of now though I can only review what you had and it was rather short like you know. Continue on with the submisison and I think it will be well received!

~ Audio ~

Ha, where did you find that song? For some reason it made me laugh. Perhaps it was you singing? O.o

Good song to go with the submission. Nothing much more to say here as any additional sound effects or voices would have seemed out of place.

~ Overall ~

I may be only one person, but I think you should continue with the project. Good luck on your decision!

Joey-Kazaam responds:

Thanks,
I appreciate your C&C, I plan on creating a series around this when I finish my exams at school.

[Shanx Vx Wanna-Be]

Looks sweet.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Even though it's stick figures you did a really good job on it all around. Smoothly drawn and neatly drawn figures and also very smooth animation all around. There isn't anything to critique here at all.

~ Story/Content ~

Really no story or plot except for a couple of sticks fighting over something. Perhaps a little introduction so we know why they are fighting and a little background story on both of the characters would have made this a little better. You know us picky viewers :P we like to know why people are beating the shit out of each other.

~ Audio ~

The music that you picked worked really well with the animation and you did a great job syncing the audio up. You also did a good job with sound effects.

~ Overall ~

In my opinion the only thing lacking from this submission was any sort of plot or reason for fighting. Without a reason or anything like that then it's just your generic stick fight with good graphics.

[Sunny]

Ha weird dream.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

I kind of like the squiggly line style in the first place so this wasn't too bad animation or graphics wise. Pretty well done actually. Is it exactly how it was in your dream? Like no backgrounds or any other detail? If there was anything else you should have added it no matter how random.

~ Story/Content ~

People have weird dreams all of the time. I love weird dreams, but I would never have a dream like this ever. Just all around random and not really that weird. Mind lobster? Lol is that something from real life that you might have heard and then for some reason it was in your dream? It's unusual for the mind to create something that random. I can't really comment on the length of the submission or story/plot since you were simply recreating a dream that you had.

~ Audio ~

Decent voice acting all around until you got to the mind lobster bit. You did one of those cheesy screams where you actually end up talking quieter, but instead raising the pitch of your voice to represent screaming. Unless that's how it was in your dream that part wasn't done well at all. Instead you need to actually raise your voice and move back from the mic a little bit.

~ Overall ~

Random dream = random flash submission. Wasn't too funny or anything like that though. Perhaps instead of just one short submission you could put many dreams that you have had together in one submission.

AdamBTrousers responds:

Thanks for the in depth review. The audio was quieter in the scream because screaming "It's a mind lobster" when your family is in the house is...odd to say the least. The graphics, background, and lack of detail are all directly from the dream. They're exactly like the dream. I can't imagine where "mind lobster" came from. Thanks again.

[rather stupidd;]

Needs a lot of work even for a trailer!

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Not too bad all around even for Madness sprites, but there is something that you can do to greatly improve your submission. When making a trailer you want to build up suspense and a good way of doing this is by slowing the submission down a little bit. If you slowed everything down on this to normal speed or even a tad bit slower than that then you would have gotten a much better result.

Also, the text that you used was very unorganized and should have been a tad bit smaller and also placed better. Just seemed very sloppy.

~ Story/Content ~

I like that you went back and forth from text to pictures, but you should have been showing small scenes directly from the movie such as a shooting scene, a sword scene, etc.. Something like that, but at the same time not giving too much away so people want to come back for more. From what you showed I really wouldn't want to come back for more.

~ Audio ~

None used at all, which also greatly dropped your score. You should add some dialogue over the text such as when it says "stronger". You should also have some suspenseful ambient music playing to get people's attention.

~ Overall ~

Slow down the animation a little bit, work on adding suspense, and implement some audio into your submission. Remember the purpose of a trailer is to get someone interested.

I hope this has helped you!

Hank66 responds:

woah!thx alot!

[Madness Short: Lulz]

Lol not bad at all.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Very good animation here. Very smooth even though it is simply using Madness sprites. What you can do to greatly increase your score of the submission would be to add a background and more detail. Just the basic ground, tree or building in the background, perhaps someone walking by in the background, etc..

~ Story/Content ~

Well if you were trying to make someone laugh then you did it for sure! Ha, there really isn't much to say here except for I think you should make a bunch of funny/random scenes and put them together so you can add some length to your submission.

~ Audio ~

Not much room for improving the audio here because of how short the submission was. The audio and sound effects that you used were well chosen though and synced well.

~ Overall ~

To really improve your future work I recommend paying attention to detail and backgrounds and also improving your submissions length by putting several pieces of work together. It did make me laugh though and was a fun short submission!

1337-Dawg responds:

Thnx for the incredibly helpful review! I will try to work on all of that! I may just put a lot of animations like this together. Thnx!

[Sprite Race Series Ep.1]

Pretty good!

I happen to love sprites so here comes a bit of a biased review perhaps?

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Very smooth sprite animation. I do think that the background going by was a bit choppy and could have been improved slightly. Still far better than any sprite animation that I can create.

What really set off this as good as all of the action that you had in there. I also loved the use of fading or the way that your brought attention to the characters in the background/foreground. Small things like that can really help animations be good!

It does seem like you got a bit sloppy with the text in a couple of spots so perhaps that's something you should think about working on in the future.

~ Story/Content ~

A race is actually something that I was thinking about working on with some Mortal Kombat characters so this really helped me out a lot in deciding on some ideas to make the race interesting.

Like I said you had a lot of action in such a short flash and it wasn't too bad at all. Not really boring, but at the same time not really exciting either. I really didn't think any parts of it were funny though so hopefully you weren't trying to go for humor. :(

~ Audio ~

Great music choice all around. Could have been transitioned a little better in between songs, but overall not too bad. Pretty decent sound effects and voices all around too. Everything seemed to be synced up well.

~ Overall ~

A nice short sprite animation. Good luck on any future projects that you may have! If you ever need a writer drop me a PM and perhaps we could work on something together sometime.

[What All Men Want]

Hmm below are my thoughts

~ Animation/Graphics ~

This could use some animation. Simple things such as background animation of what the words are explaining kind of faded out so you can't really see what's going on so you don't totally ruin the joke. Also, some nice things like fades and transitions could probably improve this submission a bit too. I tend to over use the fade effect so if you use transitions make sure to vary them. There can be too much of a good thing sometimes.

~ Story/Content ~

Kind of gave me a smile, but not too much of one. Really in my opinion it was quite predictable. Also, it was very short. I think that if you want a submission to be successful like this then maybe you should include several of these jokes/rhymes to the submission. Just having one is kind of useless and doesn't make the submission too interesting.

Also, even though it was rather short and had a low file size I still think you should have had a preloader. If not a preloader than at least a play button. I never like it when a submission starts playing on it's own.

~ Audio ~

None at all and this was really the biggest downfall of this submission. There were quite a few downfalls, but this was by far the biggest. You should have included nice sensual background music and a sensual female voice (maybe could get away with a guy since it was suppose to be about a man receiving oral sex anyway).

~ Overall ~

Needs some basic animation and transitions, more jokes/length, and background music and voices.

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