Hmm, not bad. Perhaps some work here and there.
~ Animation/Graphics ~
The graphics weren't anything amazing, but I honestly have no room to talk because it's much better than I can draw in flash or any program on the computer. The drawings themselves could be improved slightly, but for the most part they were pretty good.
I think that the letters could have been a bit fancier. Perhaps more colorful colors on top of some better transparency work could have made them more pleasing to the eye.
~ Story/Content ~
Kind of boring. I'm in that type of mood tonight though because I'm tired. That being said I won't be biased towards it because of this little fact. It was very short and nobody really wants to see a guy sitting there on a seat and sit a song. (I'm sure some people do, but probably not the majority of people)
Perhaps instead of just having him sit there and the items show up, you could have the actual events (you did this a little) appear and the song just be the background like a music video. I think the biggest thing is working with the length of the submission. You could always add to this one and submit a second version of it later on.
~ Audio ~
The audio was good quality, but there isn't much to comment on since you didn't create the audio yourself. The lip syncing was pretty good though. Wasn't anything amazing, but really well enough that you can't notice it being off at anytime.
~ Overall ~
The graphics could use a little bit of work (not too much though), but the biggest things about this would be the length and content of the submission. Work on these aspects and you'll have a good creation. :)
~ Review Request Club ~