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[CoolJaw: T.T. II-V]

~ Review Request Club ~

~ Animation/Graphics ~

The graphics were pretty good in this one. I now notice that the bubbles pop up in order, but they do move so quickly that it's hard to tell. Especially if someone isn't paying that close of attention.

There were two spots where I thought the graphics could be improved. The square as a eye hole on the door was very out of place compared to the sketchy style of everything else. The fire place could have used some red color. It could have also represented evil or death that way as well. (both of these places towards the end of the submission)

~ Story/Concept ~

A nice addition to the series. A lot of questions are cleared up to me in this one. It was one of the few in the series that instead of creating a bunch of questions it only created a few and answered more. That's how I know we are going to reach the end here pretty soon. It's been a pretty good journey all around and once you're done with them I'll have to watch them all together.

In one of the bubbles I noticed an error. The one part should have said "So I'll come by your office first thing tomorrow" instead of "I come by your office first thing tomorrow."

~ Audio ~

The audio was alright. I wouldn't mind hearing something from newgrounds play. It might also give your submission some more views. I noticed when the song started over again it didn't sound too great. The transition in between could be worked on a little bit.

~ Overall ~

A good addition to the story that clears some questions up. A few things here and there to fix, but nothing major.

Celx-Requin responds:

Hello,

I hopefully will get a chance to work with a newgrounds artist to score "Cooljaw" soon, it really depends on whether there is any interest or not from people wanting to actually purchase a dvd or something...

I agree about the eye hole.
Sincerely,
- Celx

[SpeedE The WFD]

~ Review Request Club ~

~ Animation ~

The animation was pretty good for the most part. I feel that you did a good job with syncing things such as the lip movement and body movements. Something that I think could have been worked on were the faster animations such as the car pulling up or when he swung his weapon. It seemed very slow and needs to be animated (the only words that I can think of) in a more forceful and swift manner.

~ Graphics ~

Just like the animation the graphics as a whole were rather good. I think there was only a couple of things that I noticed. The first thing was I really didn't like the black fade that you used. It wasn't a very appropriate place to use it and it would have looked much better if you would have cut to the next part. The second thing was when the character put his arms up to protect himself (before he transformed) you could see an odd area on his elbows where the outline disappears.

~ Story/Content ~

This is something that would make a very interesting series in my opinion. The average day regular guy who gets picked on by the jocks, but has special powers. The idea might not seem original, but the World's Fastest Drummer super power seems to be a very original way to approach this theme.

This was a good introduction flash to what would be a good series. In future episodes I would like to see more character development, more story line, and much more length in the submission. Probably somewhere around 3X as much content as what you had in this one. It should be fairly easy to meet the MB upload limit while having about 3X as much material in your story. (6.6 MBs)

~ Audio ~

If people aren't paying attention then this submission should sound very true to life. You did a great job with the ambient background noises of animals and things like that. The other sound effects like the car opening up sounded really good as well.

The voice acting was pretty good and I don't have any problem with the acting itself, but the quality of the sound was kind of low. It sounds like you used MP3 files? I'm personally a fan of having the high quality sound even if it means increasing my file size. The voices take a hit from quality and it kind of takes my rating down a little bit. Better quality voices would have made this much better.

~ Overall ~

Very few things wrong with the animation and graphics, you set this up for a good series if you wanted to continue, and the audio was really good except for the quality of the voices.

I hope this review has helped you, that you continue to work and produce flashes, and that you come back to the Review Request Club whenever you submit a flash again.

~ Review Request Club ~

McAfee-Enterprises responds:

Fro, you are so right on! Thanks for your time in this review. We would love to do a SpeedE The WFD series and through so much encouragement from NG reviews, we are inspired to do so.......If you didn't know already and I think most here didn't which gave us some very honest reviews is that SpeedE The WFD grew from WFD The Game, did ya know that? He's the last have to beat character and hardest level as seen at World's Fastest Gamer............

If you know of any talented writers and creative folk we would love to explore how to get SpeedE to a series if you honestly feel there's merit?

[Rumpleblumpkin]

Take the good with the bad I guess.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

The animation wasn't very good and the drawings were very poor in every single part of the submission. If this is your real drawing style then you need to not even think about the details and just go with the basics for right now. Once you get the basics down then you can go into the details to make it better.

~ Story/Content ~

I laughed at the jokes because they were random and fast paced. That was the best part of the submission and you have a pretty good sense of humor. I suggest keeping up the humor and focusing on improving the art section of your submissions.

~ Audio ~

The voices weren't too bad and most of the time they added to the overall humor of the submission. Everything with the sound was pretty decent all around.

~ Overall ~

The submission was funny, but it seems that you really need to focus on improving your drawing style and working on your animation skills a bit.

[La morte]

Hm, sorry for the low score...

You said you wanted to know if you should keep trying and I think yes you should, but you need to keep practicing. I feel that you have the talent to keep improving so don't give up.

~ Animation ~

There was some good animation and some bad animation. For example I thought the walk cycle was pretty good. As a negative example you really had a lack of the small animations that could have made it better such as having the eyes animated and the mouth animated. Small things like this could have really helped the submission out in my opinion.

~ Graphics ~

The drawings were alright in some parts, but in other they weren't so great. The text was too small and the book didn't look too great. The characters were drawn alright, but towards the end of the movie it got very sloppy. The drawings really needed some more detail as well. Right now I would say it isn't very good, but with some practice and time it could be decent.

~ Story/Content ~

Something you have to think about is the different speeds in which people read. The first book entry was too short for me too read, but the second was too long and I got bored waiting. Some others were too slow, too fast, and yet some were just good enough. Having the person be able to click to go on or push a button to go on when they are done reading.

Another thing that I didn't like was how small the font was and somebody with bad eyes wouldn't be able to read what you had in the first place. You should also make your i's capital when you are using them as a word.

It seems like English isn't your first language, but if it is then use proper sentence structure please. If it isn't then it was pretty good for it not being your first language. Another thing that I couldn't read was the scratches on the gravestones. They were pretty hard to read as they were sloppy.

Lastly, I was kind of confused on what was going on. Perhaps it's because it was very hard to read and I couldn't get all of it, but I also think that the flash doesn't really explain what's going on very well and this could be more clear.

~ Audio ~

The music that you used was really good. I think that you could have used more sound effects. When your character was outside you should have had some owls or other creepy outside noises like that. When the dead people wrote on the grave stones you should have had a scratchy sound as well. Small sounds like this could have helped the submission out.

~ Overall ~

A button to switch through the text, better graphics, better animation, more details, and a better explanation of what is going on could have really helped this submission out a lot. Keep working and someday I'm sure your skills will have improved a lot.

Kufa responds:

I really apreciate your review i got a lot excited when you wrote it and i going to do all what you say you are absolutely right about the drawing and the animation and of course about the story but i didn't add any sound effect becuse i wanted to do an animation without sounds just a song to describe i didn't see that the story was bored and it was ovbius why.I really like your review and if you say i can improve well i going to try. I THANK YOU A LOT FOR THIS you have be honest and not so rough because when i see all the reviews and watch again the movie i was dessapointed of what i done but if you say i should practice then i will do it right now.
thank you

BTW: yes i dont speak a good english because i born in Argentina and i speak spanish and in some words i got to use the translator so i see my mistake there thanks for show me.

[Clock Crew Restaraunt]

Entertaining meatness

~ Animation/Graphics ~

I have to say that I found the graphics pretty poor and that there was little animation in the entire thing, but it wasn't poor enough to really hurt the rating of the submission too much in my opinion. This would have been much better with better graphics though and probably more entertaining.

~ Story/Content ~

Ha, completely random and I found it kind of funny. Not funny enough to make me come back and watch it again, but funny enough to bring the rating of my review up higher than maybe it should be.

~ Audio ~

Something tells me that's not what they were singing in that song, but something also tells me that the Asian fold really don't care about the meat that they sell as long as it's cheap and it brings money in. I found the song to be funny and translated in a funny way.

~ Overall ~

I guess this is what I would call a good spam submission and a decent to poor serious submission. Subtitles were kind of funny and the whole thing had a bit of humor in it.

k3ltr0n responds:

THE SUBTITLES ARE CORRECT

[Planetoid - Chapter 1]

Hmmm... I don't know what I watched...

~ Animation/Graphics ~

The animation was pretty smooth and the graphics were pretty good with your own unique style. There was really only one part that wasn't so great. When the space ship started to launch off of the planet the quality of the drawing went way down and the animation was kind of choppy. That was really the only fault that I had with it.

~ Story/Content ~

You had a lot of nice graphics and good content, but I couldn't tell what was going on at all. I could tell that the alien guy there was lonely and felt really sad, but I really had no clue what was going on other than that. It almost makes me interested enough to come back and review the other submissions in the series to see where it's going, but it could use some explanation for sure.

~ Audio ~

You had a good use of audio and a good use of sound effects in this submission. Nothing really else to comment about the audio other than you did a good job with it.

~ Overall ~

It was interesting to watch, but I was left with the impression that I had no clue what was going on.

Fate responds:

Haha, well, you weren't far off the money.
Chapter one was pretty much improvised, but from then on, I had direction.
Don't even mention the scene with the rocket taking off :P
It makes me squirm seeing it, and I regret it a lot.

I'm glad you liked the graphics, though, as I put a lot of time into improving them.
Thanks for the great review.

["We're Starfox!"]

Pretty good submission.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

The animation and graphics are some of the better that I've seen. It was pretty smooth all around and the graphics were drawn good for the most part. There were a few things that weren't drawn the best, but it was still really good all around. I liked the use of fading, zooms, and pans that you used. Small things like that really add up.

~ Story/Content ~

I love the idea of using the audio from the game and then building a story around it. More of that in the audio section though. I went through the deleted scenes first and thought that the bathroom scene was kind of funny. The movie itself was pretty comical all around and entertaining to watch.

~ Audio ~

Like I said before, the use of the game audio to create a story is pretty cool. The quality wasn't so great for the voice clips, but I'm sure there wasn't much you can do about that. Sound overall was pretty good.

~ Overall ~

It was kind of funny and the animation was pretty good. I like the way that you used the audio clips. The credits made me smile a little bit with the space ship going lower so the credits could come by.

PuffballsUnited responds:

Thanks for the thorough review!

[Mario Vs Sonic Entry]

Hm, ending wasn't so great.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

So how did this do in the contest or is the contest not over yet? I personally thought that the animation was great and I'm always impressed when people can make sprite animations fast paced and enjoyable like this. In my opinion it's animated with some of the best sprite animators I had ever seen. Backgrounds and everything else were great. Very good visually all around.

~ Story/Content ~

I would usually complain about there not being a story to why the two sides are fighting, but I don't know what the competition requirements were. I personally rather see a reason why they are fighting even if it's something small and stupid like why Peter and the big chicken fight on family guy.

The fight was pretty action packed and lasted a pretty good length. I wouldn't mind it being a tad bit longer, but you timed it pretty well. The ending wasn't very good in my opinion simply because I couldn't tell what happened. I wouldn't have known unless you wrote that they both punched each other in the face in a response to one of the reviews below.

I would have rather seen it end with them crashing through the ice and fighting underwater or something similar to that.

~ Audio ~

The sound effects were really good and I like that you used some voices here and there. The music was also pretty good, but don't shy away from using the audio in the audio portal here. There's some really good stuff.

~ Overall ~

It was a pretty good action packed submission. I wouldn't have minded a reason why or a better ending though.

DarkZeroProductionZ responds:

Thank you very much for your review ;)
I did good in the Contest, I got first place :D

Yeah, about the story, he just asked for a Sprite Fight, I really forgot about the Story/plot. The ending... That was a counter punch, The sprite came out really bad, lol, and I realized it came out bad until I finished it, and I really didn't want to make the sprite all over again in another position, so I just left it like that. Also, I actually wanted to have a fight underwater while Mario turned into Ice Mario, but sadly Sonic doesn't know how to swim, and he's scared of water. Anyways, thanks for your review, I appreciate it.