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[Samuel and Rosella]

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~ Animation ~

I enjoyed the slow animation personally even if most didn't. I thought that you exaggerated their speed just enough. They didn't walk too slow for it to become annoying to watch, but it was still slow enough to add a very humorous effect to it.

Some things could have been worked on here as well. Things such as when the old couple stabbed the teenager with the umbrella. I thought that was very jumpy and it could have used a bit of the "in between" animations such as them actually stabbing the umbrella into him instead of it just instantly appearing in him.

Overall animation was smooth in most parts, but it had it's times when it was kind of skippy/glitchy or basically not as smooth as it could have been. A bit rough at times.

~ Graphics ~

The graphics were done very well in some places and not so well in some places. The people themselves were drawn pretty decently. I thought overall they could have been done a bit better, but they weren't bad by any means at all.

An example of drawings that could have been done a bit better would be the example of the newspaper. The paper itself was done very sloppy and it could have been improved greatly.

I also didn't like the use of real pictures too much. They really didn't take away too much, but I do think that if you would have drawn the signs instead of using pictures of the real life versions that it would have looked a bit better.

Overall though like I said the graphics weren't what I would call bad. Most backgrounds and characters were done well and with some fine tuning this could become better graphically quite easily.

~ Story/Content ~

I had personally never heard the song, but it was a perfect song to make a flash along to. You did a pretty good job representing what the song was saying. Like I said, the song was perfect to create an animation as it painted a pretty good visual of what was happening.

I found it funny in some parts such as the reopening of the mall and the destruction of the mall along with it. There was also a nice bit of humor added when you animated the "whipped" part literally even though that wasn't exactly what it was meant to be.

Overall, good job with making this into a flash. You did a great job picking a story and filling it with great content.

~ Audio ~

I know I've said it a couple of times already, but the song was perfect to create a flash for. You synced up the animation pretty good to go along with the song as well. Perhaps the usage of some quiet background noise would have been nice.

The quality of the song wasn't the best. I don't know if that had anything to do with lowering the quality so it could make a smaller size flash or if it was simply the file type you had.

~ Overall/Summary ~

I think that the best thing you could do to improve the submission is just work on the quality of the graphics and the smoothness of the animation a bit more. The story was perfectly fine, but the audio did need to sound a bit better in my opinion.

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chesster415 responds:

The newspaper gets worse at the flash progresses. It mentions that in the newspaper specifically. I kind of wanted the first attack to come as a surprise if you hadn't heard the song before, that's why the umbrella moves so quickly during the stabbing, but if the flash runs really choppy it might help to lower the quality a little. I'm not usually into animating but I felt like this song deserved a portal entry. I'll try to improve the sound quality too.

[[TT] CD09 -thdrky-]

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~ Animation/Graphics ~

Did I catch the little black guy on the bottom right hand corner accidentally moving a couple of times? Such as a glitch and not an actual animation. Like he jumped from his position slightly a few times. Maybe my eyes were playing tricks on me.

Even though the slideshow type format that you used was done well it probably would have looked better if you had drawn the pictures yourself instead of using google pictures.

Some extra animation would be nice such as some movements in the character. Perhaps him walking around a bit, his eye blinking, digging through the trash that he was next to looking for food, etc..

Drawings could have been done a bit better. I know it was clock day and everything, but it probably would have looked a bit better if the drawings were done well. Some of the clock day flashes are very spam like, but have wonderful graphics.

~ Story/Content ~

I'll admit it right now that I'm very racist and this was no where near what I was hoping it was going to be. (That's up to you to figure out if that was a joke or not) Simply a black man that fit all of the stereo types instead of just some of them... hmm, sounds more like real life instead of an interesting story for a flash submission.

I almost felt like someone should have drove by in the background and shot him at the end of the story. It just seemed very fitting.

~ Audio ~

I wouldn't want any other type of voice on clock day. I think perhaps you could have used some subtitles though as the voices can be hard to understand every now and then. I also heard some static, but I wasn't sure if it was my computer itself or static in your sound.

~ Overall ~

What I would expect on Clock Day.. A bit more effort then I had on my two submissions that day.

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YukariYakumo responds:

It was a lazy, quick, first attempt at Flash and a celebration of the day based on a shitty joke, and you understand that. Thank you for the review, and we'll make something better next time.

[Otakuhell At Animefest 09]

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~ Animation/Graphics ~

The drawings were done quite well and the frame by frame animation gave it a pretty cool effect. There could have been some room for better animation/animation in the first place, but it was actually pretty cool the way you just did the frame by frame stuff.

~ Story/Content ~

A nice little advertisement. I think you could have made it a bit longer. Maybe because it was too short, but maybe because I thought the song was awesome. :P We'll get to that later though.

Seriously though with what you had I wouldn't be too interested in whatever you were advertising. You really didn't sell it enough. Actually I had no clue what it was about and all I can remember was a link that I'm not that interested in visiting.

~ Audio ~

Ha, this made the submission. This audio could have probably went well with many submissions, but it went especially well with this submission. Good choice. :)

~ Overall ~

Needs to be a tad bit longer, more explanation, and maybe a little bit animation other than the frame by frame that you had.

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[Mac, PC, and a Hedgehog]

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~ Animation/Graphics ~

Really the biggest downfall to the submission. The animation was very simple and during most of the submission it was very poor quality. Actually the quality was much better then most of the things that I could animate, but still that's not always a good thing. :P

I do think that the eyes of Mac were animated pretty good as they were kind of humorous. The mouths weren't animated the best, but they were pretty well synced with the voice acting for the most part. Drawings themselves really could have been worked on and I think that if that was worked on then the submission would have turned out much better.

~ Story/Content ~

I'd have to say that this story was probably one of the best parody ideas or at least quite humorous. Very original idea if I may so so myself and you did a great job with the story. There were times that I laughed a bit, but the overall feeling of the submission was that it was quite funny.

~ Audio ~

All of the voice sound quality was pretty good. I think the best voice was for Mac, but I didn't like PC's and Sonic's voice as much. Whatever you used to make the voices different didn't sound the best and I think the use of normal voices would have been just as good if not better.

~ Overall ~

Almost all of the points came from the story/content section. The voices could have been a tad bit better, but I think the animation was the biggest downfall. Keep working hard though!

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RecD responds:

yep, I will! I DID do a new animation. If you wanna check it out, go to my page. It's called "the trix fix". Tell me what ya think!

[Skeleton's Revenge]

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~ Animation/Graphics ~

For the most part the sprites were animated well. There was one spot where the old man was shooting and his feet didn't really touch the ground, which stuck out like a sore thumb and there was also a part where the man was dragging the skeleton and other guy around, which looked very odd. I wasn't sure if he was suppose to be physically dragging them, which would be very hard to represent with the sprites that you used or if he was using some sort of magic force. If he was doing the later then you should have used some sort of animation or graphic to represent this force.

~ Story/Content ~

I agree with Coop below me that you should have had a subtitle bar at the bottom of the screen instead of having it in the way of the animation itself. Keeping the button would be a good idea as it was nice to be able to read at our own pace and then go on with the movie.

I hadn't watched your other submission and I don't know if it's a prequel to this or not, but honestly this one was sort of random. Plot could be worked into something pretty good though and I could see this moving in the right direction in the next submission.

~ Audio ~

I think voices could have worked here, but the subtitle bar would have worked just as good in this case. Music and sound effects were perfectly fine as well.

~ Overall ~

Good sprite work except for a couple of parts and a workable plot.

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[Chibi Theatre 1]

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~ Animation/Graphics ~

Hm, some things weren't too bad such as the flame stuff on the red guys head. That was animated decently. The background, even though you didn't make it, looked rather good in the submission in my opinion. The characters could have been developed a bit better though.

I think the best thing to do to make the characters better would simply be getting rid of the black lines around the outside of the character (stuck out on the arms the most) and make them seem more attached.

~ Story/Content ~

Hm, total lack of humor. There might have been some stuff in there that was funny, but it seemed more like inside jokes more than anything else so it's hard for the public to get stuff. The best comedy is jokes that everyone can get and then a few inside jokes sprinkled along every now and then.

Sometimes the text moved way to fast to read comfortable. It was possible to read, but still went by too fast. The grey text that was used was also a little hard to read as it meshed with the background. Perhaps you could make a transparent black subtitle bar on the bottom of the screen so you can still see things behind it, but with white letters on top of the subtitle bar it'll be rather easy to read.

Also, a couple of other things such as animated birds, animals, etc.. something going on in the background might add a nice extra touch to the submission.

~ Audio ~

The music was pretty good in my opinion. The change between songs wasn't the best though and could be worked on to be a tad bit smoother. Maybe even looking into a voice actor or two along with a lip syncing tutorial could help make the submission a tad bit better.

~ Overall ~

I think the mediocre animation/graphics and the complete lack of an interesting plot made this a poor submission. The graphics can be improved with time, but the plot really needs to be improved to keep people wanting to watch something such as this.

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PikaRobo responds:

Thank you for your feedback. But I want to remind you this was the first real flash I ever made, so that is the explanation of why the movie is a bit stale, experimentation. It is only logical the more I work with flash and animation, I could make better episodes. Also, the characters are supposed to have that kind of form (such as arms being detached and no visible mouths, that was intentional) thats how they stick to their chibi styled nature, but I'll see if I could fix them up sometime. However I will try to follow most of your advice in future works, including to find ways to make it easier to read and more interesting plots and characters.

Either way thank you for telling me how to improve, I will.