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[Mac, PC, and a Hedgehog]

~ Review Request Club ~

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Really the biggest downfall to the submission. The animation was very simple and during most of the submission it was very poor quality. Actually the quality was much better then most of the things that I could animate, but still that's not always a good thing. :P

I do think that the eyes of Mac were animated pretty good as they were kind of humorous. The mouths weren't animated the best, but they were pretty well synced with the voice acting for the most part. Drawings themselves really could have been worked on and I think that if that was worked on then the submission would have turned out much better.

~ Story/Content ~

I'd have to say that this story was probably one of the best parody ideas or at least quite humorous. Very original idea if I may so so myself and you did a great job with the story. There were times that I laughed a bit, but the overall feeling of the submission was that it was quite funny.

~ Audio ~

All of the voice sound quality was pretty good. I think the best voice was for Mac, but I didn't like PC's and Sonic's voice as much. Whatever you used to make the voices different didn't sound the best and I think the use of normal voices would have been just as good if not better.

~ Overall ~

Almost all of the points came from the story/content section. The voices could have been a tad bit better, but I think the animation was the biggest downfall. Keep working hard though!

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RecD responds:

yep, I will! I DID do a new animation. If you wanna check it out, go to my page. It's called "the trix fix". Tell me what ya think!

[Chibi Theatre 1]

~ Review Request Club ~

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Hm, some things weren't too bad such as the flame stuff on the red guys head. That was animated decently. The background, even though you didn't make it, looked rather good in the submission in my opinion. The characters could have been developed a bit better though.

I think the best thing to do to make the characters better would simply be getting rid of the black lines around the outside of the character (stuck out on the arms the most) and make them seem more attached.

~ Story/Content ~

Hm, total lack of humor. There might have been some stuff in there that was funny, but it seemed more like inside jokes more than anything else so it's hard for the public to get stuff. The best comedy is jokes that everyone can get and then a few inside jokes sprinkled along every now and then.

Sometimes the text moved way to fast to read comfortable. It was possible to read, but still went by too fast. The grey text that was used was also a little hard to read as it meshed with the background. Perhaps you could make a transparent black subtitle bar on the bottom of the screen so you can still see things behind it, but with white letters on top of the subtitle bar it'll be rather easy to read.

Also, a couple of other things such as animated birds, animals, etc.. something going on in the background might add a nice extra touch to the submission.

~ Audio ~

The music was pretty good in my opinion. The change between songs wasn't the best though and could be worked on to be a tad bit smoother. Maybe even looking into a voice actor or two along with a lip syncing tutorial could help make the submission a tad bit better.

~ Overall ~

I think the mediocre animation/graphics and the complete lack of an interesting plot made this a poor submission. The graphics can be improved with time, but the plot really needs to be improved to keep people wanting to watch something such as this.

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PikaRobo responds:

Thank you for your feedback. But I want to remind you this was the first real flash I ever made, so that is the explanation of why the movie is a bit stale, experimentation. It is only logical the more I work with flash and animation, I could make better episodes. Also, the characters are supposed to have that kind of form (such as arms being detached and no visible mouths, that was intentional) thats how they stick to their chibi styled nature, but I'll see if I could fix them up sometime. However I will try to follow most of your advice in future works, including to find ways to make it easier to read and more interesting plots and characters.

Either way thank you for telling me how to improve, I will.

[Sad Link]

More content

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Very simple animations all around and mediocre artwork. The art could have been worked on a bit and the introduction to more complex animations could have added some nice features to this flash.

~ Story/Content ~

I think this could have been better if it was longer of course, but I think the way of approaching this to be longer would be to have a slower build up to the climax. (pun intended)

Something like flashbacks of the two characters together and happy times, etc... Then you could go to show Mario with her.

~ Audio ~

The song wasn't bad and went decent with the submission. Nothing really much to talk about there.

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J0hnnyR0tt3n responds:

Thank you.

[A Doomed Robot]

Decent animation.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Really not that bad. The animation was pretty smooth and the drawings were done quite nicely. I think something that could have really helped this out though would be a nice background. Whether it just be some nature outside or something more like a factory inside, but a background would have looked much better on this animation.

~ Story/Content ~

Nothing really here is there? Just a random short flash about a robot being blown up. Perhaps some sort of story could be implemented? If you didn't want any sort of plot or story then at least add a few more situations where the robot fails and gets destroyed. Maybe having him be destoryed in 2 or 3 more different ways would have made this better.

~ Audio ~

Pretty good sound effects and they were well synced with the submission. For any future submissions make sure to check out the audio portal for some good stuff. They have something there for every situation.

~ Overall ~

Nice animation, backgrounds would have been nice, and just needs some content to be really good.

clemdawem responds:

thanks

[Ant men]

Hmm, not bad man.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

I think the Ant Men looked pretty good and for the most part the animation was smooth and perfectly fine. I don't like that a few times you didn't even include the animation of the bullets though. Sometimes you didn't even know who was shooting until you noticed the person that was shot. Next time I recommend adding the animation to the bullets for all of the Ants.

I really enjoyed the background to this submission. You did a good job on going into detail with the pictures, books, etc.. That really made the submission good!

~ Story/Content ~

I liked the use of ants instead of stickmen. I would have liked to see you do this and actually finish it. I understand that flash is hard and yes it is hard, but you are clearly decent at it all around. I recommend starting it by having the two different commanders telling their armies what the mission is (to get the cake obviously, but you could also build on that by having them collect a large group of food) and also giving them a speech to get pumped up.

There needs to be a way to tell from the different armies which can be done by color differences. I understand they are ants, but one group could be fire ants and the others could be carpenter ants, etc.. After they get their speech they could go on and you see the war being fought, etc.. The story would be up to you from here on, but I think it's a good way to approach it.

~ Audio ~

The sound effects were really good here. Just about the right volume and synced well with the animation. Something like this would be cool with voices, but of course that would depend on how much more content that you add to it.

~ Overall ~

A nice short flash, but really needs some work. I know that you think flash is hard, but keep practicing and you will get better. Also, why is the genre sports? I don't see where this is really sports related.

jokebookpro responds:

I dont know why it say sports but it always says sports, i guess i didn't finish the cartoon cause it would look better as a game thanks tho, you know a worms game like..

[Oh no I'm all alone]

Not too bad.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

There are a couple of things to improve on here. First off you could improve the drawing just a bit. The animation to the voice wasn't synced up the best, but also wasn't terrible. There is some room for improvement there. Something that I would have liked to see though would be a nice background. Something pretty simple such as outside with some trees/clouds or maybe even something inside with a table/bookshelf in the background. Maybe even a nice little fade or blur effect on the things in the background for extra effect.

Another thing that can look cool with something like this is some small background animation. Whether it just be the wind blowing something by in the background or whether it be something like a clock changing time. There is actionscript for a clock so it would just keep moving along as time went by in the real world.

~ Story/Content ~

There just isn't much here. When I think of a music video I think of a lot of exciting scenes. I understand that this was a small loop, but what would have been better would be adding a different scene a bunch of times whenever he sang the lines over again. Since this was about being alone you could have had a scene where he was in the corner of a room just curled up in a ball rocking back and forth and crying because he's all alone.

Just some small stuff like that. I'm thinking about 10 different scenes give or take a couple and then you can loop it from there.

~ Audio ~

The audio that you picked wasn't the best quality. Sounds like the mic he was using wasn't the best, but again it isn't terrible. Like I mentioned before the lips weren't synced the best with the voices so that is really the only place where the audio can be improved in this submission at all.

~ Overall ~

A short loop that needs some more complex animations and some more content before I would consider it good. It looks like you have decent skills all around though so you shouldn't have problems improving and making something like this better. Keep on working and you will keep on improving. Hope some of the ideas I gave you helped. :)

manjunath responds:

Thanks for taking the time and effort to give such a detailed and wonderful critic. Your review will help me a lot in the future. 10/10 for this review!!! :-D

[Super Mario Invaded pt.2]

Hmmm

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Just as good as the first one if not a bit better. Smooth animations and again you had some more advanced stuff rather than the normal sprites that you see from noobs. (Again like me lol)

~ Story/Content ~

I loved how in the beginning you backtracked just a little bit so we could see the other side of a story. That really makes the flash interesting so we can understand why things happened the way they did and really makes it look like you know what your doing when creating a script.

It seems like there is more behind this then just the random invasion and that perhaps some evil character is trying to get rid of all the good sprite characters so it can take over the world or something of that sort. You set it up good so I'll have to watch the next one to find out.

~ Audio ~

Pretty much the same thing I said last time. The sound effects were well timed and the music went well with the animation. Voices might be interesting to try, but I just couldn't see them working in this type of flash.

~ Overall ~

Keep it up you are doing a great job. Perhaps work on the file size a bit though. This one was shorter than the last one, but had a larger file size. Have you been optimizing your audio?

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sleeeeep responds:

Yes in the third episode i hope to give more of the story and et up questions to be answerd. Good review, thanks