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[Bloody Refreshment]

Pretty cool.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

The drawings and animation was done fairly well. There is small room for improvement, but I think it looks pretty good all around.

~ Story/Content ~

Personally I thought it jumped around a lot. I almost had a hard time figuring out what was going on. I like it when submissions are slowed down a bit though. The cat message was completely random. :P

I like what you did here though. Ninja's = cool and zombies = awesome. So why not put them together right? What could be better than that?

If you are thinking about going on with this series here are a few ideas for you.
The zombies and ninja zombie join forces and wreak havoc on the world creating a huge zombie army.

The ninja is able to control his zombie instincts and becomes a even more dangerous foe whether it be for good or evil. For good he goes to find the creator of the zombie to stop the source. Along the way he finds armies of zombies and has to be the hero. For evil he takes over the world. :P

Before the virus fully infects the ninja he fights his way to a cure. He then goes to find the creator of the zombie to stop the source. Along the way he finds armies of zombies and has to be the hero.

~ Audio ~

The sound effects were done nicely and the voice acting was decent. The best voice acting was for the zombie though. The other voices had a little room for improvement.

~ Overall ~

Ninjas + zombies = awesome.

CLiff0Rd responds:

Cheers for the review, and the handy hints.
This was actually done as a final assignment for the Introduction to flash. I obviously expanded a lot more than I needed to.

Most of the sound effects were taken from my previous creation, Buzz & Franky, which is also posted up. Just let it be known, there's a year gap between the two, without any further study or practice.

If I do continue on with the series, I have many story lines prepared. However, I wouldn't start the series unless I had a few fans of the first.

Cheers for it all, and yes,
Ninjas + Zombies = Awesome.
Might put in a pirate to keep those fans happy too.. Who knows?

CLiff0Rd

[Airin]

Not bad.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

All I can really say about this submission is that the great animation and graphics really boosted it's score and rating. It's really the only great thing about the submission. You can draw pretty good and the animation was smooth.

I wouldn't have mind seeing it do a couple of different things though. It took the same amount of steps, stopped, looked up, etc.. The same every time as it looped. I think perhaps having it walk a different distance, move differently, etc.. every time would make it a bit more interesting. Perhaps about three variants so by the time it repeats again it's not so boring seeing the same thing over and over.

~ Story/Content ~

Hm, I guess it was sort of relaxing. Perhaps it's not something I enjoy relaxing to. :P Perhaps you could have drawn out about 5 or so different backgrounds and gave people the choice of which background they wanted to choose.

Perhaps a dirty sewer, the park at night time, inside of a house, etc.. Some basic things like that. I think you could do a pretty good job since it looks like you can draw pretty good.

~ Audio ~

Not a bad song at all. Not really any room for improvements here since there wouldn't be any reason for a voice or sound effects.

~ Overall ~

Not bad. I wouldn't mind seeing the choice of other options as backgrounds.

Chroust responds:

Thank you, that isn´t bad idea. I try make my work better with different backgrounds,

[[TG] Muffin Man]

Ha, nah too bad.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Really well done here! I recommend you continuing the project just due to the fact that you are a pretty good artist/animator. Personally I can't critique your style in anyway.

~ Story/Content ~

*Reads the author comment*

Well work on getting the transitions down and I think you have a decent idea for a movie. Perhaps you could work a series out of this someway? I'd be interested in watching the episodes if you made a series. As of now though I can only review what you had and it was rather short like you know. Continue on with the submisison and I think it will be well received!

~ Audio ~

Ha, where did you find that song? For some reason it made me laugh. Perhaps it was you singing? O.o

Good song to go with the submission. Nothing much more to say here as any additional sound effects or voices would have seemed out of place.

~ Overall ~

I may be only one person, but I think you should continue with the project. Good luck on your decision!

Joey-Kazaam responds:

Thanks,
I appreciate your C&C, I plan on creating a series around this when I finish my exams at school.

[Sunny]

Ha weird dream.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

I kind of like the squiggly line style in the first place so this wasn't too bad animation or graphics wise. Pretty well done actually. Is it exactly how it was in your dream? Like no backgrounds or any other detail? If there was anything else you should have added it no matter how random.

~ Story/Content ~

People have weird dreams all of the time. I love weird dreams, but I would never have a dream like this ever. Just all around random and not really that weird. Mind lobster? Lol is that something from real life that you might have heard and then for some reason it was in your dream? It's unusual for the mind to create something that random. I can't really comment on the length of the submission or story/plot since you were simply recreating a dream that you had.

~ Audio ~

Decent voice acting all around until you got to the mind lobster bit. You did one of those cheesy screams where you actually end up talking quieter, but instead raising the pitch of your voice to represent screaming. Unless that's how it was in your dream that part wasn't done well at all. Instead you need to actually raise your voice and move back from the mic a little bit.

~ Overall ~

Random dream = random flash submission. Wasn't too funny or anything like that though. Perhaps instead of just one short submission you could put many dreams that you have had together in one submission.

AdamBTrousers responds:

Thanks for the in depth review. The audio was quieter in the scream because screaming "It's a mind lobster" when your family is in the house is...odd to say the least. The graphics, background, and lack of detail are all directly from the dream. They're exactly like the dream. I can't imagine where "mind lobster" came from. Thanks again.

[rather stupidd;]

Needs a lot of work even for a trailer!

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Not too bad all around even for Madness sprites, but there is something that you can do to greatly improve your submission. When making a trailer you want to build up suspense and a good way of doing this is by slowing the submission down a little bit. If you slowed everything down on this to normal speed or even a tad bit slower than that then you would have gotten a much better result.

Also, the text that you used was very unorganized and should have been a tad bit smaller and also placed better. Just seemed very sloppy.

~ Story/Content ~

I like that you went back and forth from text to pictures, but you should have been showing small scenes directly from the movie such as a shooting scene, a sword scene, etc.. Something like that, but at the same time not giving too much away so people want to come back for more. From what you showed I really wouldn't want to come back for more.

~ Audio ~

None used at all, which also greatly dropped your score. You should add some dialogue over the text such as when it says "stronger". You should also have some suspenseful ambient music playing to get people's attention.

~ Overall ~

Slow down the animation a little bit, work on adding suspense, and implement some audio into your submission. Remember the purpose of a trailer is to get someone interested.

I hope this has helped you!

Hank66 responds:

woah!thx alot!

[Madness Short: Lulz]

Lol not bad at all.

~ Animation/Graphics ~

Very good animation here. Very smooth even though it is simply using Madness sprites. What you can do to greatly increase your score of the submission would be to add a background and more detail. Just the basic ground, tree or building in the background, perhaps someone walking by in the background, etc..

~ Story/Content ~

Well if you were trying to make someone laugh then you did it for sure! Ha, there really isn't much to say here except for I think you should make a bunch of funny/random scenes and put them together so you can add some length to your submission.

~ Audio ~

Not much room for improving the audio here because of how short the submission was. The audio and sound effects that you used were well chosen though and synced well.

~ Overall ~

To really improve your future work I recommend paying attention to detail and backgrounds and also improving your submissions length by putting several pieces of work together. It did make me laugh though and was a fun short submission!

1337-Dawg responds:

Thnx for the incredibly helpful review! I will try to work on all of that! I may just put a lot of animations like this together. Thnx!