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There's something about watching these in this style that's somewhat beautiful. Maybe it was just the emotional plot to this submission.
Is the audio the same in the final product? (He asks even though he has full access to check himself)
Please help, thank you.
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Thank you for the serious response.
I don't understand what you mean, you're confusing me young man.
The temp music used is the theme from Forest Gump, which is almost an inside joke among the office because it's the go-to "tender emotional" temp track, but the music in the final short is arranged by Steve Lehman, who puts his own spin to it and makes something original.
Further audio mastering is done by Ben Governale of Cymatic Studios.
I'll write my review in English, then in poor Spanish.
~ Animation/Graphics ~
You have a really nice art style, but it is also very simple. I would like to see you grow as an artist and make things a little more detailed. The animation itself was smooth, but could be worked on a little bit as well. Adding a little bit more detail into the background would improve this submission a little more as well.
Tienes un estilo de arte realmente agradable, pero también es muy simple. Me gustaría verte crecer como artista y hacer las cosas un poco más detalladas. La animación en sí era suave, pero podría ser trabajado en un poco así. Añadir un poco más de detalle en el fondo mejoraría esta presentación un poco más también.
~ Story/Plot ~
I guess I didn't really get the punch line. Perhaps that's because English is my language. Since you are posting to a website that is almost primarily an English speaking website it may be a good idea to add optional subtitles on the bottom of the screen that people could toggle on and off. That way if they speak Spanish they can keep them off and if they speak English they can toggle them on.
Supongo que no conseguí la línea de golpes. Tal vez eso es porque el inglés es mi idioma. Puesto que usted está fijando a un Web site que sea casi sobre todo un Web site que habla inglés puede ser una buena idea agregar los subtítulos opcionales en la parte inferior de la pantalla que la gente podría alternar encendido y apagado. De esa manera si hablan español pueden mantenerlos fuera y si hablan inglés pueden cambiarlos.
~ Audio ~
I have no complaints at all here. Everything seemed good. It was kind of silent overall and could do with some more background sounds and voices. All in all good though.
No tengo ninguna queja en todo aquí. Todo parecía bueno. Fue un poco silencioso en general y podría hacer con algunos sonidos de fondo y voces. En general bien.
~ Overall ~
A pretty simple animation that could use a little bit of work, but pretty well produced. I'd highly recommend subtitles because of the population of the audience you'll have here.
Una animación bastante simple que podría utilizar un poco de trabajo, pero bastante bien producido. Recomiendo altamente subtítulos debido a la población de la audiencia que usted tendrá aquí.
~ Review Request Club ~
Thanks for the commentary, just a few think you should know:
- I actually did this almost a year ago and I first uploaded to YouTube with English subtitles (also don´t worry for the "story", it all started because I drew those two guys hi 5ing and my friends told me to animate it, so that is why it doesn't really makes sense)
- The most recent animation that i did was a 4 second animation in the Mama Luigi Project, so you can see if I have improved.
- I was bored one day and remembered that I used to watch a lot of Newgrounds back in the day (I don´t remember why, I didn't knew English back then) and I decided to upload the video here and see what happens, but I don´t know how to put English subtitles here.
In other words thanks for taking the time to review mi animation and I appreciate the criticism, I´m working on another one in between school and stuff, maybe i´ll do and Spanish and English version since it doesn't have voice acting.
Wtf?
That was directed towards both the audio and the animation. So first I'll start off with the animation. You've definitely haven't gotten a lot better since the flashes we made with the... oh.. I don't even want to bring those up. :P Ahem, so yeah. The animation was really basic, but you've have gotten a lot better at it.
Soo... what does the Otter really have to do with anything here? It was kind of out of place and I could see the voice acting being better served on something more cartoony with a human character.
The voice acting itself was ok, but it really wasn't that funny. It seemed sort of forced... well... maybe it just didn't go along with the right style of animation?
Also, the video stops playing when it is over, but the audio still keeps going? I thought I was missing something, but maybe you should have thrown on a replay button at the end to make things more functional.
Hahahaha, thanks a lot for the review.
I just heared the audio and wanted to do something quick for fun. And also: "The animation was really basic, but you've have gotten a lot better at it." Don't lie, to me, I know I am a programmer and that will never be possible haha.
About the Otter and the voice acting. It was just a random thing of the momment. I listened to it and made it in less than 2 hours. So yeah, it is crappy haha.
But well, it worked because it was fun to do something different.
Thanks once again again for the review!
Hey, I noticed the fridge in the background.
~ Comments~
Other than that I didn't like it. In fact, the only reason that I didn't give you a zero is because I'm giving you the benefit of the doubt that you were actually trying to create something entertaining and funny instead of spamming something bad on purpose. You just really hit and miss here.
~ Animation/Graphics ~
I would consider them good, but you really did nothing here right? I mean even when people use sprites they do more work, tweening, fbf, placement of the graphics, etc..., but this was basically you putting words into a program and then the program did everything? At least that's how I'm seeing it.
~ Story/Graphics ~
I think this may be somewhat funny to some of the 5th graders that I taught and apparently one of the reviewers down below... I guess it may just be an opinion, but little elementary level humor doesn't usually make people laugh. This was a major step below things like South Park, Family Guy, and other shows like that. Those at least make me laugh, but this was seriously like someone took a decent idea and removed 90 percent of the humor out of it. Perhaps it's because of the lacking emotion that I'll talk about shortly below.
~ Audio ~
With a simple program you could have easily had real voices put over this video along with some sort of dramatic background music. The lack of emotion really doesn't help this already poor submission's case. In fact, it might have been exactly what this piece needed to get a couple of points out of me. I would have had the same effect just reading this as text as I would these voices talking out the little skit.
~ Overall ~
I'm sure I'm with the majority of the people when I say create something yourself, rethink what the majority of people actually find funny at the average age on newgrounds, and find some voices not made by a computer or robot.
~ Review Request Club ~
ummm, i agree with your hypothesis of how this non-animated-by-me-animation is a general piece of shit.
Yeah, some were pretty good.
~ Animation/Graphics ~
If I had more time I would break this down by author, but I don't so it'll have to be an overall view. Some were really good and yet some looked liked they were made by an amateur. Most were pretty smooth and in fact some were things that I would compare directly to Krinkels work, but on the other side there were some that ran very slow and rough around the edges. For the most part the animation was pretty good.
~ Story/Content ~
That thing is I've grown out of enjoying random killing like this a long time ago. So after awhile this did start to get boring. I did my best to try and stay interested, but there just really needed to be more humor in my opinion.
The only thing that was funny to me was the one where the clown went on a killing rampage and at the end shot himself in the head with the gun. Other than that it was like watching the same generic shooter again and again.
~ Audio ~
The music was good in my opinion and for the most part the sound was good as well. There were a few that were lacking sound effects and that made them seem very out of place. The submitter should have went through and added them.
~ Overall ~
A lot of mindless killing just like Madness should be, but so generic that it lacked a lot of individuality. I wouldn't have minded seeing more humor and perhaps something way different that we wouldn't expect to see from Madness.
~ Review Request Club ~
Haha thanx for ur review and for giving ur opinion
I can't believe I didn't review...
I forgot all about reviewing this submission. Sorry about that man, I should have been right on that the day it was submitted. I must have been busy or something.
The disco Bahamut's dancing in the beginning were simply awesome. All of the animation was pretty simple, but done very well.
The letter from Dream-of-Duke was great. I wonder who the brilliant person was that came up with that... wait I mean... I can't believe Dream-of-Duke could think about complaining about the update even on Bahamut's birthday!
The secret letter was great as well. I would have never figured out the password by myself. You weren't too hard to trick though as I only told you that I had guessed right and you spilled the secret word only moments after. :P
The music was a great fit all around. You and your Mexican music, I should have known what I was going to hear. ;) I just pick of course. Next time loop the song though. It actually just ended while I finished this review.
Anyway, this is a great birthday flash for a great user.. I mean dragon... Keep up the good work and I hope to work on a project with you someday.
Thanks for the detailed review. I love them ^^
And yeah, Dream-of-Duke is such an awesome guy ;D
Bahamut deserved something like this because he's awesome. Not because we're afraid of him :P
This was actually good.
~ Animation/Graphics ~
The characters were very rough, but what I enjoyed about this submission was the nice backgrounds and the notice that you might not be the best artist in the world, but you do put some effort into your work. I think the only thing really missing is the animation of the mouths when your characters talk.
~ Story/Content ~
I was surprised that I enjoyed this. It's like entertaining spam, but that would make it not spam at all now would it? As spam isn't generally something that you would like. It has a style of it's own and I don't know what to call it. It wasn't the funniest thing that I had ever seen, but I ended this submission saying to myself that I actually enjoyed what I watched.
I was thinking that the submission was going to end when he got to his destination, but I was happy that it didn't because that would have made the submission run a bit longer than what would be fun to watch. I do think that you could have ended it a bit better though as it was very abrupt and out of place the way that you did end it.
~ Audio ~
Good sound effects and good music all around. The voices were funny at times, but they are more annoying then anything. I'm completely willing to do voices for you, but I don't really have a Mexican accent in my arsenal and I'm assuming that you're using the fake robot type voice things for a reason.
~ Overall ~
It's like a really good spam type submission. It's entertaining, but not really too funny or exciting. I kind of like the style though and thought that it was an interesting piece all around.
~ Review Request Club ~
Thanks alot for your review, i wasn't expecting anything that in depth hehe
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